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Describe a book that you have read more than onec time.

#book #onec #time
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Now, I would like to introduce my
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 book, which is entitled Ten Types of Humans.
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 addition, it is only one special book for me, because I have read it over three times. In fact, I read it many times, not because I like it,
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 because most of the information always allows me to feel confused, and I needed to try my best to understand all the content by reading it many times. If my memory serves me right, about two months ago, I decided to read it, since during that period, I had a confusing question about human beings.
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, when a human can show good
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 and bad
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? So
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 book definitely became my first choice.
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 is because it shows a piece of professional knowledge about humans.
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 writer is a famous lawyer, but unfortunately, I forget his name, I just remember that he is a German. I still remember that after I
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finished my first
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, I had
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feeling
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 about it, what I am trying is that, I felt confused about most of
stories
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, but meantime, I
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 over the mood, as I am
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 kind of person who is fond of trying challenging thing in daily life.
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supported main points
Ensure all main points in your essay are clearly supported with explanations and relevant examples, which appear to be lacking or insufficient in your text. Aim to clarify and elaborate on each point to enhance the reader's understanding.
complete response
While your essay introduces the book and provides some personal reflections, it needs to fully respond to the prompt by describing specific aspects of the book that led you to read it multiple times. It should also contain a balanced conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed.
logical structure
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, and use transition words to enhance logical flow. There is room to improve the connection between ideas and adherence to a central thesis throughout the essay.
introduction conclusion present
Develop a clear introductory paragraph to set the context and intention of the essay, and a concluding paragraph to summarize your key points. The introduction and conclusion are present but need to be more pertinent and concise.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas presented in your essay need to be explicit and detailed. Attempt to clearly explain why you found the book confusing and yet intriguing, and how it challenged you. Avoid vague statements that do not comprehensively discuss the book's impact on you.
relevant specific examples
You should incorporate relevant examples from the book to substantiate your views, such as specific chapters or themes that caused confusion or intrigue. Merely stating emotions without underpinning them with specific references leaves the essay lacking in depth.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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