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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 in life. In a beginning ,problem-solving skills in childhood is based on good nutritional level , have a suitable house and parents who be able to treat with their child in proper methods , so , a significant
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 of money can accelarate these factors for having a healthy child in basicc levels ,as far I knew , there are many experimental studies have been done on the papulation for clarifying economic status and healthy behaviours in families ,but , if we have an insight in other side of wealthy gaurdians to support their own children must consider which problems we are causious that must be solve by kids that average income families could be more better that wealthy families ,
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 , problem-solving abilitiees is based on having a good experiencee to behave in different situation for getting a good result for having a delight life ,
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, in basketball game among students in primary schools are so different in painting class for drawing a pleasant figure for achieving a good score that and it would be based on fundamental needs for having a safety , warmth parents and primary equipment for eduction. In sum
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