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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The first table depicts the profits of fairtrade-labelled coffee in different
european
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countries
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, in the
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 1999 and in 2004. The second one shows the same data but for a different product, bananas.
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, the
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 increased over the years in most
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. The rise of one product in one country does not seem parallel to the increase
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sales
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 of the other commodity since the profits
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. Looking at the first table, the UK is the only country where the
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 of fairtrade coffee increased drastically, going from a profit of just 1.5
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millions
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euros to 20
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. The other
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 considered experienced a smaller but still impressive
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 of
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. To mention a few, Switzerland went from 3 to 6
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, Belgium from 1 to 1.7. Considering the second product, which is fairtrade bananas, the UK shows again some interesting data. In
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 country in 1999 the commodity was quite popular with a yearly profit of 15
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, in 2004
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 number rose to 47
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. Other
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 did not have
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 enormous
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 and in some
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 the gain even decreased. In Sweden,
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of
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euros profited in 1999 dropped to 0.9
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sales, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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