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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The charts illustrate the average
household
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energy
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 consumption
as well as
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 the
amount
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 of harmful gas production in five groups in Australia.
Overall
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, the highest
amount
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 of power is used for heating,
whereas
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 cooling accounts for the lowest
amount
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 of
energy
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 use.
Moreover
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, water heating can contribute to the most pollutant
household
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energy
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 use as opposed to cooling. In terms of
household
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energy
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 consumption, heating is the highest at approximately two-fifths and water heating accounts for the second most
energy
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 consumer
household
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 at just over a third.
In contrast
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, the proportion of cooling
energy
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 usage stays at 2% among Australian people. As can be seen in the second chart, water heating releases the highest
amount
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 of greenhouse gas emissions at around a
third,
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while
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 cooling is the least at exactly 3%.
On the other hand
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, heating produces as much gas as refrigeration does at less than a fifth.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household, energy, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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