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The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram describes
about
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two different
road
 tunnels in different Australian cities, which
where
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were
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 built
by
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in
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 the
year
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years
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 1986-1998
with
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the
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 cost of $
555million
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555 million
 and
other
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another
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 in the
year
 2002- 2006 at the amount of $
1,1Billion
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1,1 billion
. The
tunnel
 which was built in the
year
 2002-2006 has the highest price for making and it took
shorter
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 period of time . The
under ground
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underground
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road
 which was
build
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 in the
year
 1986-1998 has
the
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 length of 2.2
kilometers
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kilometres
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,it is less distance compared to the
tunnel
 constructed in the
year
 2002-2006
with
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 3.6
kilometers
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kilometres
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,and the height of the
tunnel
 is
more
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with a small curve that was constructed in the
year
 2002-2006. the old
tunnel
 has a
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four-way
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four way
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four-way
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road
 as the new subway has
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six-way
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six way
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six-way
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road
 ,
however
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 the old bridge is covered with water and sand
as
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and
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 the new one is covered with stone and clay
Finally
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 the new
tunnel
 was
strong
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nwhen
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when
 compared to the old one which more
number of
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vehicles
can
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 travel at the same time .
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, year, tunnel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban infrastructure
  • commuter
  • traffic congestion
  • toll collection system
  • vehicular capacity
  • bi-directional lanes
  • engineering feat
  • innovative design
  • safety measures
  • construction materials
  • ventilation system
  • emergency exits
  • tunnel clearance
  • inauguration date
  • public-private partnership
  • sustainability features
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