The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.
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The given graphs,
illustares
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illustrate
information about the amount of
water
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consumed by Three different nations ( EGYPT, SAUDI ARABIA,
CANADA
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and CANADA
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)in three different sectors
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accordingly
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apply
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Agriculture, Domestic,
Industry
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and Industry
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.
Overall
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, the amount of salt
water
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is
vast
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the vast
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majority. In the pie charts, Fresh
water
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is only 3% of All
water
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.
Ground
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Groundwater
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water
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is a fifth of all
water
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whereas
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, surface
water
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contains 1
persent
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per cent
respectively. Ice and Glaciers
has
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just above
third
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the third
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quarter. In the line graph, Agriculture consumes almost 80% in EGYPT and SAUDIA ARABIA
on the other hand
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in CANADA they
uses
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use
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only one in ten. But, for domestic
uses
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uses,
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all the folks
are remain
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approximately the same around (12%, 12% and 10%) respectively. For
the
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Industry, Saudi Arabia and Egypt uses only 10, 8 proportions of their total
water
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supplies
whereas
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, In Canada the
uses
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use
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in the
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industry
industy
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industry
they reached the peaked around, 80% which is around eight times bigger
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then
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than
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these two nations,
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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