The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.
The given graphs,
illustares
information about the amount of Correct your spelling
illustrate
water
consumed by Three different nations ( EGYPT, SAUDI ARABIA, Use synonyms
CANADA
)in three different sectors Correct word choice
and CANADA
Linking Words
accordingly
Agriculture, Domestic, Rephrase
apply
Industry
. Correct word choice
and Industry
Overall
, the amount of salt Linking Words
water
is Use synonyms
vast
majority.
In the pie charts, Fresh Add an article
the vast
a vast
water
is only 3% of All Use synonyms
water
. Use synonyms
Ground
Correct your spelling
Groundwater
water
is a fifth of all Use synonyms
water
Use synonyms
whereas
, surface Linking Words
water
contains 1 Use synonyms
persent
respectively. Ice and Glaciers Correct your spelling
per cent
has
just above Change the verb form
have
third
quarter.
In the line graph, Agriculture consumes almost 80% in EGYPT and SAUDIA ARABIA Correct article usage
the third
on the other hand
in CANADA they Linking Words
uses
only one in ten. But, for domestic Change the verb form
use
uses
all the folks Add a comma
uses,
are remain
approximately the same around (12%, 12% and 10%) respectively. For Change the verb form
remain
the
Industry, Saudi Arabia and Egypt uses only 10, 8 proportions of their total Correct article usage
apply
water
supplies Use synonyms
whereas
, In Canada the Linking Words
uses
in the Fix the agreement mistake
use
Correct your spelling
industry
industy
they reached the peaked around, 80% which is around eight times bigger Correct your spelling
industry
Linking Words
then
these two nations,Replace the word
than
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