The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.

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The given graphs,

illustares

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illustrate

information about the amount of

water

consumed by Three different nations ( EGYPT, SAUDI ARABIA,

CANADA

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and CANADA

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)in three different sectors

accordingly

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apply

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Agriculture, Domestic,

Industry

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and Industry

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Overall

, the amount of salt

water

vast

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the vast

a vast

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majority. In the pie charts, Fresh

water

is only 3% of All

water

Ground

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Groundwater

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water

is a fifth of all

water

whereas

, surface

water

contains 1

persent

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per cent

respectively. Ice and Glaciers

has

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have

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just above

third

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the third

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quarter. In the line graph, Agriculture consumes almost 80% in EGYPT and SAUDIA ARABIA

on the other hand

in CANADA they

uses

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use

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only one in ten. But, for domestic

uses

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uses,

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all the folks

are remain

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remain

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approximately the same around (12%, 12% and 10%) respectively. For

the

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apply

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Industry, Saudi Arabia and Egypt uses only 10, 8 proportions of their total

water

supplies

whereas

, In Canada the

uses

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use

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in the

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industry

industy

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industry

they reached the peaked around, 80% which is around eight times bigger

then

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than

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these two nations,

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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?