With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the growth in demand
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an online version of books causes the fall for paper ones. I am opinionated that
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edge-cutting innovation can
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series
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of benefits
such
as easy access into people’s lives,
while
others believe there are more drawbacks. On the one hand, the modest opportunity to
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capable of reading the individual’s favourite
book
online be it on the way to work or at home, makes people’s
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more convenient. The easy access
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e-books provides people a choice to enjoy
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reading
while
they are travelling without any inconvenience
such
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place for
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book
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not
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the fear
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the
book
or
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it at home.
Moreover
, there are
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numerous apps for
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reading online, which simplifies the warm’s
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lives as they do not need to have a bibliotheca at home.
Therefore
, oftentimes, a person has no necessity to pay for some books or go to the public
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bibliotheca
, as he can find
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in
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the internet for free or a small charge
by
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one click.
On the other hand
, being constantly glued to devices even for leisure activities as reading a
book
, people may struggle
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electromagnetic waves occurred in the reason of
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gadgets. The time
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electronic devices not only for educational or work purposes may
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to some health issues like
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poor eye-vision or
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scoliosis.
Moreover
, some individuals who have an obsession with the 18th century and touchable paper books with their wooden smell
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will have not
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this
experience during the reading
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e-books.
To sum up
, I believe there are more pros rather cons in terms of online reading as
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comfort and money spending play
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major role for most people.
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