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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph
describe
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describes
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about
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the comparison of three places respectively where in a European country from 1987 to 2007.
Accroding
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According
 to the chart, the mountain is the least popular one among the places
whereas
 the coast is the highest popular
place
. In 1987, the
cost
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coast
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has
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had
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 40
millions
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million
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visitors
, the
mountains
has
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had
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 20
millons vistors
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million visitors
 and the
lakes
has
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had
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 only 10
millions
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million
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visitors
. But, the
lakes
 became
popular
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more popular
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 than the
mountains
 in 1997
that
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which
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 went up to about 40
millons
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million
millions
. When in 2002, the
lakes
 sharply increased to about 75millions
visitors
. But, the trend
suddently
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suddenly
 dropped to about 50
millons
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million
 in 2007. The coast fell back to 35
millions
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million
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 in 1992 but the
visitors
 gradually increased every year and it was the highest popular
place
 in 2007 which reached
to
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about 75
millions
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million
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.
Although
, the
mountains
was
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were
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 the least
visitors
place
 and the
vistors
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visitors
were
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apply
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marginally increased from 1987 to 2007. In 2007, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 reached
to
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about 35
thousands
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thousand
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.
Overall
, the coast was the most popular choice
at the end
 of the year and the
lakes
 followed second
place
 and the
mountains
wasn't
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popluar
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popular
 at that time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, millions, visitors, mountains, lakes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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