Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is wast of time. Do you agree or disagree?

Book reading habits is one the best quality among children whether
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books
or cartoons. A few
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and
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fathers
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desire that their kids only read the educational-based on magazines at
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instead
of comic
novels
due to
they think
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entertainment-based
on
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novels
is not
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time
to read about
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. I strongly disagree with
this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with, parents think their kids read only
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academic
books
at all
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even in
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rather than comic
books
but the little ones should have more entertainment
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whatever they want to
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it
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. To be more precise,
studyinng
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studying
all
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the time
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is not a good thing
to
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the toddler's mind because
in
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age
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they might
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gotten depression and stress,
therefore
, they should need some free
time
to read cartoon-based on magazines to enjoy themselves.
For example
, a recent
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survey
conducted by the NGO said that
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infants like to read more entertainment-based
on
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novels
as compared to their educational syllabus
books
because they need more
entertainments
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.
Furthermore
, reading comic
books
can obtain enormous creative
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thought
through
to toddlers who are more concerned
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those in order to creative skills might be increased from childhood periods. When a kid read
any
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comic
novels
while
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he
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assumes
any
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one
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best character
of
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him
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and
he
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takes the best quality of the character
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their life,
as a result
, the little ones might be the moral policy.
For instance
, if a toddler studies cartoon
books
, she will obtain more good qualities of the characters with she knows good and bad behaviour.
Hence
, mother should
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to
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their infants to read
the
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entertainment
books
too.
To conclude
, studying academic
books
at all
time
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brings more adverse
effect
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on children,
then
, fathers should give permission to their kids to read
comix
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novels
in their free periods in order to
they
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get more knowledge from those magazines. So, I strongly disagree with
this
statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
this
brings more benefits to them certainly.
Submitted by reanudeepan on

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