Research into new types of medicines and treatments are essential for improving health and dealing with diseases. Who do you think should fund these researches: private companies, individuals or governments?

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Econonic

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Economic

development not only brings material lifestyle but

also

brings more sickness to the population

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nowadays. Research should be needed to

findout

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find out

new

medicines

to improve

folks

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well-being with illness.

Although

, the main argument is that who

sponsers

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sponsors

capital whether the authorities, companies or

people

. I think the

government

should allocate more

funds

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these.

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essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons.

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with, the authorities would collect more taxes from their citizens

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each year,

therefore

, they should provide enormous

funds

research

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sector in order to the scientists may find new

kind

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kinds

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medicines

to cure sickness. When

government

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the government

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concentrates more

this

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field

while

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people

's life expectancy can be increased

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advanced

medicals

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medicine

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, HIV was the life

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illness in

few

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decades back, the

government

was allocate

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huge money to find out treatment

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scientists and researchers.

Therefore

, the ruling party should enhance the

meduical

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medical

field to explore new medicine

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for

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mankind

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well-being by providing

enor

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enough

,mous cash

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this

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fiels

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fields

Furthermore

, the private medicine companies

also

contribute to

experiment

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a new

medicine

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medicines

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with the

government

, and

as a result

, the ruling party shares amount might

reduce

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then

they

alocate

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allocate

funds

to other fields equally to develop.

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, private pharmacy enterprises not only

thinks

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profit

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but

also

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concerns

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individual's

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health to serve their society.

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people

's health.

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, both private

organisation

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as well as

the

government

should be together to

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their

amout

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amount

to find some new advanced

medicines

for mankind.

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advanced

medicines

are significant in the modern lifestyle because

people

get more diseases at

nowadys

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nowadays

. I

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concern

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the

government

should allocate more

funds

to the research sectors to find new

medicines

to improve humankind's life

expectrancy

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expectancy

ratio.

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Research into new types of medicines and treatments are essential for improving health and dealing with diseases. Who do you think should fund these researches: private companies, individuals or governments?

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