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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.
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The bar chart illustrates the favourite activities for children in the age range of 5 to 14 years old in per cent.
Overall
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, we can say that guys are more into skateboarding or rollerblading and bike riding,
as well as
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 electronic or computer games. Meanwhile, girls are more excited about arts and crafts. Interestingly, watching TV or videos has become a favourite for a fellow and daughter. Looking in more detail, 3 activities with higher participants, both bike riding and electronics or computer games are preferred by about 60% of girls and 80% of boys.
Additionally
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, there is no difference between youth and young women in watching TV or videos. For the remaining activities, skateboarding or rollerblading
together with
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 arts and crafts,
their
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apply
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female participation is roughly 20% and 60% respectively. Both the boys percentages are approximately 40%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure activities
  • favored
  • noteworthy trends
  • disparities
  • participating
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • speculating
  • surprising findings
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • promotional efforts
  • educational planning
  • balanced lifestyle
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