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Today,many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
Nowadays, neighbours are not known in huge cities by many
people
. In modern society,
people
 are becoming insensitive to everybody around them so their distance is likely
to
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 far. The main solution to remove
this
 problem is changing individuals’s attitudes toward the world, the society.
Firstly
, the development of technology makes citizens insensitive. Technology, the world,
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construction, and even
human
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 are modernizing but the distance between
people
 and
people
are more
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 longer. The rapid change
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 technology
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 most citizens
are
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crazy about them and spend a lot of
time
 on the devices. Some research point out that most teenagers and adults
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nowadays are addicted to
the
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social app
where
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 have interesting content, internet friends and some funny games, and all of
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 make
people
 become insensitive.
However
, governments and parents should have
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strict
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 for their individuals and children.
This
 solution can help everybody spend more
time
 on other activities not only using the internet. It can be done by governments and parents who have power,
their
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 need to
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 to reduce their children's
time
 on high tech like having a real friend,
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 opportunities in their jobs. In conclusion, the main cause of
this
 problem is that
people
 spend a minority of
time
 with
people
 around them which makes the distance between are far and far. These problems can be solved by the government and parents' actions who play important roles in changing their individual, children's minds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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