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The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2022.

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2022.
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The following table provides data on the percentages of 3 consumption categories in 2022 for Irland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. In an
overall
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while
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 all 5 countries spend money mainly on food, beverages and tobacco,
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leisure and education
spendings
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 are the lowest indicators at the table. Examining the details, the people in Turkey allocated their budget mostly for nutrients and cigarettes, representing 32.14 per
cent
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, which was the highest proportion among the others.
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, Irland was
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second place, accounting for 28.91 per
cent
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Additionally
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, the
percentages
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 for
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attires and shoes was 9 per
cent
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 in Italy,
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, Sweden stood at 5.40 per
cent
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, which was the lowest figure for
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literacy and entertainment, the leading position belonged to Turkey(4.35%)
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 to Spain, where the expenditure on
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knowledge and spare time was only 1.98 per
cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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