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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

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Nowadays the number of overweight
people
 is constantly increasing.
This
 essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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this
 epidemic and
then
 describe the possible effects of the
problem
. In my opinion, the foremost causes of
obesity
 are inactive lifestyle and unhealthy eating habits. Today more and more
people
 rely on cars
instead
 of walking, have
less
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fewer
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 physical demands at work and prefer inactive leisure activities.
This
results
 in burning
less
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 calories and gaining weight.
Moreover
, the
problem
 is accentuated by the growing number of
people
, who eat irregularly and consume large portions of high-calorie food.
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, about 50% of the adult population in Europe with so-called disordered eating suffer from
obesity
. The possible effects of
this
problem
 include physical health problems and loss of productivity. First of all,
obesity
results
 in incorrect functioning of the human body and contributes to the risk of developing some chronic illnesses.
For example
, as body fat percentage increases, the person’s metabolism worsens, which in turn may result in diabetes or heart
diseases
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.
Secondly
, overweight
people
 are very unhealthy and often suffer from stress and tiredness.
This
 lessens their work capacity and
results
 in lower productivity.
For example
, it has been proven that an obese person needs to put more effort
to complete
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 some
task
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 than a person with normal weight.
To sum up
,
obesity
 is a big
problem
 that affects a lot of
people
 nowadays. It’s mainly caused by inactive
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and eating disorders and
results
 in severe health problems and loss of productivity. (251 words)
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