The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The graph indicates the fundamental
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of soil degradation in
1990’s
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;
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the degrees of
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soil productivity decrease in three various territories
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the same decade are discussed.
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, it is explicit that generally over-grazing played the most crucial role in
this
phenomenon.
Furthemore
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among the studied areas, it was Europe that had the most damage. Regarding the scheme, what stands out is that over-grazing with 35%
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accounted for
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great part of
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productivity reduction.
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deforestation and over-cultivation with a minor difference were in the second and third ranks.
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the other parameters with only 7 per cent were at the least and
last
place.
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to the table, the most and the least
degradaded
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degraded
regions were Europe and North America, 23% and 5% respectively. In more detail, over-cultivation had no impact on Oceania;
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over-grazing.
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and over-cultivation were the most imperative reasons in North America and Europe separately.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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