The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four 

different sports between 2001 and 2011. 

Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, 

comparisons where relevant.
The graph outlines the
number
of students of a school in the UK selected to take part in running , swimming , basketball and football from 2001 to 2011.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
while
football remained popular through the period , the
number
of
renners
Correct your spelling
runners
renters
and swimmers improved in similar
whereas
swimming declined .
Moreover
basketball
considerable
Change the word
considerably
show examples
dropped in popularity. Looking at the details , with regards
about
Change preposition
to
show examples
ball sports , football remained popular for a decade
while
, between 2001 and 2007 slightly fell and grew .
On the other hand
, basketball
steadily
Add a missing verb
was steadily
show examples
popular for
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
5 years ,
after
Correct word choice
but after
show examples
2006 , the
number
of students slumped to just 20. Focusing on running and swimming , in a seven-year from 2001 to 2007 , the
number
of runners significantly climbed , after that stayed popular to just 60 . Regarding swimming surged for a half-decade to just over 50 .
However
, between 2006 and 2001 the
number
of swimmers students plummeted to just 30 .
Submitted by TUTOO on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: