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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Mr and Mrs Ali, My name is Ramisha Ejaz and I am from Pakistan. I hope my letter finds you in good health. I am writing
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 letter in response to your advertisement in a reputed newspaper, In which you mentioned the requirement of an Urdu language Teacher for your two
children
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. I think, I am suitable for
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 job as I have done my masters in Urder literature and I already have 5 years experience of teaching in a well-reputed school in which I taught the Urdu language to 8-9 years
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apply
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children
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 class so, I am quite familiar with the behaviour of these age group students and read that your
children
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 are of same age group.
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, I would like to tell you that I am planning to move to your area with my husband as he got a job in your mentioned area so, Its quite easy for me to come to your place and teach your
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 and in
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 way, It would be beneficial for both of us. I hope you will consider my skills and enthusiasm regarding
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 job and looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Ramisha.
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task achievement
Ensure you fully expand on each point required by the task. Providing concrete examples of past experience and clarifying how you would fit into the family environment would strengthen your response.
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Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter to match the context of a job application, avoiding overly casual phrases.
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Organize your writing with clear paragraphing, each centered around a single main idea for better readability and flow of information.
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Use a wider range of linking words to better connect ideas and paragraphs, enhancing the overall cohesion of your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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