The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

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Given are two

bar

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charts concerning the

participant

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participants

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of genders in doing

housework

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namely cooking, cleaning, pet caring and house repairs.

While

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the former

bar

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chart reveals the rate of men and women who do

housework

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, measured in

percent

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per cent

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, the latter

bar

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graph indicates the figure of

time

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boys and girls do

housework

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, counted in minutes.

Overall

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, cooking is the main

housework

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completed by all sexers and it is invested a remarkable amount of

time

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by humans. Regarding the first

bar

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chart, the ratio of women who take part in cooking and cleaning

are

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as high as that of men. Cooking and cleaning which are completed by boys are over 80 and 60 respectively.

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, women join in exactly 60 and 40 equivalently.

Besides

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, pet care and house repairs are the activities that had the lowest

humans

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number of humans

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from 0 to 20. With respect to the second

bar

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chart, the spare

time

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girls spend cooking

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is 20

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minutes more than boys. After that, cleaning is the second activity that takes their

time

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with merely 45 minutes with males and approximately 70 with females.

Moreover

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, pet care in

two

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the two

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genders is the same as the ratio of spending with exactly 20 and house repair

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apply

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invested the lowest

time

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compared to each other active with between 0 and 18.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, housework, time with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

217 words

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