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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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Given are two
bar
 charts concerning the
participant
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participants
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 of genders in doing
housework
 namely cooking, cleaning, pet caring and house repairs.
While
 the former
bar
 chart reveals the rate of men and women who do
housework
, measured in
percent
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per cent
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, the latter
bar
 graph indicates the figure of
time
 boys and girls do
housework
, counted in minutes.
Overall
, cooking is the main
housework
 completed by all sexers and it is invested a remarkable amount of
time
 by humans. Regarding the first
bar
 chart, the ratio of women who take part in cooking and cleaning
are
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is
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 as high as that of men. Cooking and cleaning which are completed by boys are over 80 and 60 respectively.
In contrast
, women join in exactly 60 and 40 equivalently.
Besides
, pet care and house repairs are the activities that had the lowest
humans
Correct quantifier usage
number of humans
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 from 0 to 20. With respect to the second
bar
 chart, the spare
time
 girls spend cooking
20
Add a missing verb
is 20
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 minutes more than boys. After that, cleaning is the second activity that takes their
time
 with merely 45 minutes with males and approximately 70 with females.
Moreover
, pet care in
two
Correct article usage
the two
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 genders is the same as the ratio of spending with exactly 20 and house repair
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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invested the lowest
time
 compared to each other active with between 0 and 18.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, housework, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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