The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below illustrates the information about the
number
of films
had been produced by five countries in three years. As will be observed, in 2007, number
of Correct article usage
the number
films
which was
been produced in Correct subject-verb agreement
were
country
A was the most
, with approximately ninety Correct word choice
highest
films
. The amount of films
in country
B is not as impressive as the country
A, but still in top
three countries with fifty Correct article usage
the top
films
were made in 2007. The third place belong
to Correct subject-verb agreement
belongs
the
Correct article usage
apply
country
D, with only 15 films
were
made in 2007. Unnecessary verb
apply
Next
we can see Add a comma
Next,
the
Correct article usage
apply
country
C and country
E which has
the lowest Wrong verb form
had
number
of films
in 2007, only
approximately ten Change preposition
with only
films
. In 2008, country
C started to become better when they produced more films
than before, overcome
Wrong verb form
overcoming
country
D and country
E. It is surprised
that in 2008, the amount of Replace the word
surprising
films
produced by country
d has
decreased, and Unnecessary verb
apply
become
the lowest in five Wrong verb form
became
country
. Change to a plural noun
countries
Country
B has a slightly
increase, with more than fifty Change the adverb
slight
films
a little bit. Only the
Correct article usage
apply
country
A still maintain
the form as in 2007. And in 2009, everything had changed. 2009 is the most successful of Correct subject-verb agreement
maintains
country
B,
when they hit seventy Remove the comma
apply
films
, better than 2008 about
Change preposition
by about
thirdty
Correct your spelling
thirty
percent
. The Change the spelling
per cent
number
of films
in country
C, D and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
country
E has also
achieve
more than it was in 2008. Verb problem
increased
Country
A, had a little decrease down to eighty films
were
made in 2009, but still Unnecessary verb
apply
reach
the aim, Wrong verb form
reached
got
Correct word choice
and got
the
first place in five countries.Correct article usage
apply
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