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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the information about the
number
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 of
films
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 had been produced by five countries in three years. As will be observed, in 2007,
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number
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the number
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 of
films
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 which
was
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were
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 been produced in
country
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 A was the
most
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highest
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, with approximately ninety
films
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. The amount of
films
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 in
country
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 B is not as impressive as the
country
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 A, but still in
top
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the top
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 three countries with fifty
films
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 were made in 2007. The third place
belong
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belongs
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 to
the
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apply
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country
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 D, with only 15
films
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were
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apply
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made in 2007.
Next
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Next,
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 we can see
the
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apply
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country
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 C and
country
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 E which
has
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had
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 the lowest
number
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 of
films
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 in 2007,
only
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with only
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 approximately ten
films
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. In 2008,
country
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 C started to become better when they produced more
films
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 than before,
overcome
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overcoming
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country
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 D and
country
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 E. It is
surprised
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surprising
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 that in 2008, the amount of
films
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 produced by
country
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 d
has
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apply
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decreased, and
become
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became
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 the lowest in five
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country
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countries
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.
Country
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 B has a
slightly
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slight
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 increase, with more than fifty
films
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 a little bit. Only
the
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apply
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country
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 A still
maintain
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maintains
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 the form as in 2007. And in 2009, everything had changed. 2009 is the most successful of
country
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 B
,
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apply
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 when they hit seventy
films
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, better than 2008
about
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by about
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thirdty
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thirty
percent
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per cent
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. The
number
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 of
films
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 in
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country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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 C, D and
country
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 E has
also
Linking Words
achieve
Verb problem
increased
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 more than it was in 2008.
Country
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 A, had a little decrease down to eighty
films
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were
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apply
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made in 2009, but still
reach
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reached
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 the aim,
got
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and got
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the
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apply
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first place in five countries.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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