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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
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The line graph given illustrates the changes that
occured
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occurred
 in 3 specific districts of crime in the centre of
Newsport
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Newport
 city over the period of 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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,
although
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 from the information that the chart above
provided
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provided,
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 we can find that automobile
theft
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 and robbery had approximately a steady trend, burglary had a
considerably
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considerable
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 fluctuation.
To begin
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 with, the rate of
theft
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 from shops had a negligible rise from under 3500 to about 3700 in 2004, followed by a
markedly
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marked
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 slip to somewhere in the vicinity of 1200 in 2008,
then
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 steadily continued with a mere fluctuation under 1500 until 2012.
Moreover
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, the number of car
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theft
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thefts
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 with a steady trend was around 2700 in 2005,
then
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 it had a drop to around 2000 in 2006, followed by a negligible rise
around
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of around
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 2500 in 2012. The diagram shows that the
theft
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 from the person had a steady trend between 500 and 1000. In the end,
although
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 all of these 3 specific figures changed exponentially, car
theft
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 was the top
theft
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at the end
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 of the graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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