The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
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The line graph given illustrates the changes that
occured
in 3 specific districts of crime in the centre of Correct your spelling
occurred
Newsport
city over the period of 2003 to 2012.
Correct your spelling
Newport
Overall
, although
from the information that the chart above provided
we can find that automobile Add a comma
provided,
theft
and robbery had approximately a steady trend, burglary had a considerably
fluctuation.
Change the adverb
considerable
To begin
with, the rate of theft
from shops had a negligible rise from under 3500 to about 3700 in 2004, followed by a markedly
slip to somewhere in the vicinity of 1200 in 2008, Change the adverb
marked
then
steadily continued with a mere fluctuation under 1500 until 2012.
Moreover
, the number of car theft
with a steady trend was around 2700 in 2005, Fix the agreement mistake
thefts
then
it had a drop to around 2000 in 2006, followed by a negligible rise around
2500 in 2012.
The diagram shows that the Change preposition
of around
theft
from the person had a steady trend between 500 and 1000.
In the end, although
all of these 3 specific figures changed exponentially, car theft
was the top theft
at the end
of the graph.Submitted by amirrezadelghandi3 on
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