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The diagrams below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year,

The diagrams below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year,
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The given diagrams illustrate how different Southwest Airport
before
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 and after construction next year.
Overall
, the major difference after reconstruction is the additional number of
gates
 both
in
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 departures and arrivals.
Moreover
, there are several facilities added
in
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 the proposed plan. Currently, Southwest
airport
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 has only 8
gates
 serving departure and arrivals. On top of that, there is a walkway path nearby the
gates
 1 to 3.
Furthermore
, there are only minimum facilities
can
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 be found in the departure area,
such
 as
café
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a café
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 and
check in
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 counter.
In addition
of
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 the expansion of the airport,
proposed
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 redevelopment plan includes doubling the number of the existing
gates
 and providing
sky
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 train to offer convenience. Between
gates
 and passport control, there will be shops added
in
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 the plan.
While
café
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the café
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 and
check in
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 counter will still be existed in the future, there
is
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 changes in the location.
Additionally
, bag
drops
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 service is going to be available in the departure area across
the
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check in
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 counter.
In contrast
,
arrival
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the arrival
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 area, which used to be empty, will offer services like car hire, ATM and café.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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