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The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.

The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.
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The bar charts illustrate American marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status in the US in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is evident that married couples outnumbered divorced ones over the 30
years
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.
In addition
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, the percentage of married adults remained highest both in 1970 and 2000. The number of people who tied the knot commenced at 2.5
millions
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million
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 in 1970,
remained
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and remained
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 the same after the next decade, yet settled into a decline, marking approximately 2.3
million
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 and two
million
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 in 1990 and 2000, respectively. Meanwhile, in the case of divorcees, the figure started at one
million
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 in 1970 and moderately increased in the next ten
years
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, peaking at around 1.4
million
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 in 1980.
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, it plunged back to 1.1
million
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 in 1990 and
further
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 dropped to one
million
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 in 2000. With these discernible changes, the 2000 figure of newlyweds precisely doubled that of divorcees. Shifting our focus to the second graph, the proportion of married ones was 70% in 1970, 10% higher than that
of
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 2000.
Conversely
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, the share of never-married adults was higher in 2000 than in 1970;
while
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 20% had never married in 2000, 15% had not married in 1970.
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, the two other categories ('widowed' and 'divorced') accounted for only diminutive portions of less than 10% in both
years
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Intrestingly
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Interestingly
, the share of the divorced witnessed a dramatic increase, soaring from 2% to 9% during the 30
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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