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Freshwater is a limited resource in certain regions of the world. Today, the escalating demand has transformed it into a global problem. What are the causes of increasing demand? What measures can governments and individuals take to respond to the problem?

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Clean
water
 is a restricted
recourse
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resource
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 in certain nations of the earth.
Nowdays
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, the increasing
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 has changed it into a global issue. In my opinion,
this
 is because excessive
developing
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development
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 exerts a negative influence on
water
 quality and
population
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the population
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 is increasing more and more. The best solution for it is that the government should make
regulation
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 preserving the environment
as well as
 individuals save
water
 their place. The main cause of the problem is that most developing countries play an increasingly more negative role in the environment for their economic aims. They continue to make
deforestration
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deforestation
 and industrialization in numerous places, using
water
 sources.
Additionally
, as the global population continues to increase, the demand
of
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 freshwater for meals, cleaning and agriculture rises. One of the most effective solutions is that the government should regulate
water
 management policies.
For instance
, the government prevent factories and industrial areas from using excessive
water
 sources by charging overuse fees.
Secondly
, people should be aware
about
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 how to save
water
 usefully through
the
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water saving
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 campaigns.
In other words
, schools should teach children how to save
water
 by establishing extracurricular
class
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classes
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, and households should take action by changing their lifestyles. In conclusion, it is evident that many countries around
world
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 will
be suffered
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 from increasingly reducing freshwater in the foreseeable future.
Thus
, both
the
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governments and individuals should participate together to solve the
water
 scarcity problems.
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Task Achievement
Your essay somewhat addresses the prompt, but the response needs to be further developed to fully answer all parts of the question. Make sure to elaborate on the causes of the increasing demand for freshwater and discuss a wider range of measures that both governments and individuals can take.
Coherence & Cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is discernible, but transitions between ideas can be improved. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph and make sure all sentences within the paragraph coherently support the main idea.

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