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Although there is a lot of translation software available, learning a language still could be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#translation #software #language
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In recent days, technology has been helping very much in people’s today
life
 and we can
also
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 that technology
are
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 playing an important role in our
life
 now. And because of the growth of technology, there are
also
 more and more
translation
software
 available
in
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 the internet.
But in
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 the other side,
although
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despite
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 the increasing rapidly of
translation
software
, there is still an opinion
about
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 learning a
language
still
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could be advantageous. And for me,
this
 is an excellent opinion.
Firstly
, everyone
have
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 known that learning is an important thing that we have to do in our
life
 and it’s
also
 a tradition of our country from the years before.
Therefore
,
although
 the
translation
software
have
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 appeared more frequently, learning a
language
are
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 always an advantage for each person.
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, there is many
school
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schools
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 in the world that require some
of
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the
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language
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languages
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 like
:
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English, France, etc,…. As their subjects at school and it leads to the more importance of learning a
language
 in today
life
.
Secondly
, learning a
language
 can
also
 bring benefit for someone who
want
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 to study abroad, because people are always likely to communicate
face to face
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 with you
instead
 of using
translation
software
. And
that
is making
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makes
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 the advantage of learning a
language
is
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more important
Last
 but not least,
translation
software
 today
are
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 very useful and I’m not unacceptable about
this
 because when learning something new, you always have some of the drawbacks and the
software
 is there for you to deal with it.
Therefore
, using
translation
software
 is good for you but learning a
language
 is always an advantage for everyone
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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