Students should be tought academic knowledge so that they can pass exams,and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be tought. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Nowadays, owing to
these
development era people should learn academic Correct determiner usage
this
skills
rather than others such
as dressing and how to cook.I totally disagree with this
statement.This
essay will articulate the reasons of
disagreement.
On one hand, the major reason wolf why cooking and dressing Change preposition
for
became
more popular and essential Wrong verb form
become
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
in
these days. To be more précis, because of loving Change preposition
apply
traveling
and wonders of knowing other cultures Change the spelling
travelling
as well as
studying abroad Presents need
to Learn cooking and dressing. The result of Fix the agreement mistake
needs
leaning
these two Correct your spelling
learning
skills
would be more useful for them. For instance
, when people need academic university they will go abroad so they should have these skills
especially
cooking in order to save money and eat Add the comma(s)
, especially
a healthy food
.
Switching to another point of why students need to study academic Remove the article
healthy food
a portion of healthy food
koweledge
Correct your spelling
knowledge
beside
cooking and dressing which is lack of Change preposition
besides
who
to dress other cultures. To illustrate communities need to know some recipes and Correct word choice
how
style
Fix the agreement mistake
styles
life
of other countries in order to be ready Change preposition
of life
new
and prime life. Change preposition
for new
For example
, if younger people have abilities to cook and more awareness of other cultures so
they might Correct word choice
apply
be have
a successful and Change the verb form
have
a
great future.
In conclusion, it seems to me that because of travelling and Correct article usage
apply
study
abroad Wrong verb form
studying
goverments
Correct your spelling
governments
government
suppose
Wrong verb form
are supposed
have
to give the opportunities for students to learn other useful Unnecessary verb
apply
skills
like cooking and dressing.Submitted by fatima1173 on
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Task Response
Task Response: Ensure your essay directly answers the question asked. In your response, you did not fully address the extent to which you agree or disagree, as the question requested. Provide more direct opinions and clearly address both views (the importance of academic skills for exams and the value of practical skills like cooking and dressing).
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: Your essay should have a clear logical structure with well-developed paragraphs. Each paragraph must have a clear main idea and the ideas must be logically ordered. Use cohesive devices appropriately to link ideas between and within paragraphs. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure pronouns refer clearly to nouns.
Task Achievement
Task Achievement: Expand on the supporting details for your main points. Provide specific examples and explanations to demonstrate how practical skills can complement academic learning. Address the prompt more directly by discussing how academic and practical skills can be balanced in the curriculum.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.
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