Many companies are strongly against having personal relationships in the workplace and impose strict policies against it. For example, an individual who involves an manufacturing company,if the place atmosphere is not good such the boss always rude with employees , and working hours Do you agree or disagree with this practice?,
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Introduction/Conclusion
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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