Many companies are strongly against having personal relationships in the workplace and impose strict policies against it. For example, an individual who involves an manufacturing company,if the place atmosphere is not good such the boss always rude with employees , and working hours Do you agree or disagree with this practice?,

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Structure

Your essay lacks a clear and logical structure, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Consider planning your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, each serving their purpose.

Introduction/Conclusion

The introduction and conclusion are present but weak. The introduction does not clearly state your position, and the conclusion does not succinctly summarize the main points of the essay. Ensure that both are clear and effectively bookend your essay.

Support of Main Points

Your main points are not well-supported with specific examples or evidence. Aim to provide clear examples that directly support your argument in each body paragraph.

Task Response

Your response to the task only partially addresses the prompt. You need to directly answer whether you agree or disagree with the practice of companies imposing strict policies against workplace relationships. Make your position clear throughout the essay.

Clear Ideas

Your ideas are not expressed clearly or comprehensively. Each paragraph should contain one main idea that is expanded upon with details and examples.

Use of Examples

You have not used relevant or specific examples to support your viewpoint. Please use concrete examples to illustrate your points and make your argument more persuasive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

320 words

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