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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.
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The graph illustrates
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how much money the American family
spend
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spent
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 on
food
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,
gas
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, and clothing from January to April 2010. The data reveals that most
of
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American
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Americans
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 prefer to spend their
expenditure
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 to purchase clothes
on
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in
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 April. In January, the highest
expenditure
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 of
USA
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a US
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 family was on
food
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 which spent approximately five hundred US dollars.
Then
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,
gas
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 was around three hundred and the lowest
expenditure
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 was on clothes around two hundred.
Meanwhile
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 in February, their spending on
food
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 and clothing were almost similar which
were
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 almost six hundred. Yet,
gas
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 decreased slightly
which
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only two hundred. In March, their
food
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expenses
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were
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decreased
with
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 only four hundred twenty. Yet, their
expenses
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 on
gas
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 and clothing were almost
same
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the same
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 which were around three hundred. In April, the
expenses
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of
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 clothing jumped up to seven hundred.
Furthermore
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,
gas
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expenses
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also
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 increased rapidly up to six hundred. Yet, the
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Americans
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americans
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Americans
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 became less
interest
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to purchase
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in purchasing
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food
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, which their
expenditure
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 was only three hundred
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, gas, expenditure, expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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