The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

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The two maps show information about the differences in

room

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changes in nature museums over a three-year period.

Overall

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, the museums added some exhibitions and became more extensive.

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with, in 2010, on the right

side

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of the museum, there was a garden where you could enjoy the view from the ocean hall.

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, there is a

dinosaurus

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dinosaur

dinosaurs

and mammals

room

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at the time on the left

side

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On the other hand

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, the museum changed in 2013 time. As we can see on the right

side

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, it becomes an ice age

room

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. Before, there was a mammal

room

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. After that, there was a small

room

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called an insect. On the right

side

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, there are three rooms: a shop

and

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apply

show examples

, more giant mammals and some human origins display space, and precisely in the corner, there is a cafe

room

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Moreover

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, Ocean Hall's ticket desk and entrance

room

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stay the same.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, side with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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