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There is an overall failure to adequately respond to the task. The prompt asks for an opinion on whether the move towards alternative medicine is a positive or negative development. Your response should focus on answering this question directly and clearly. Provide a balanced consideration of the topic or clearly explain your point of view with sufficient detail. Ensure you do not go off-topic and that each point made is relevant to the question at hand.
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