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Nowadays, instead of locally sourced produce, many supermarkets sell a variety of imported foods from all around the world. Does this advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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There is no denying the fact that the
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 are essential. The benefits of receiving homemade produce have increased in recent years. It is useful to utilize wonderful
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 in the city. In
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 with, on the one
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, there are different advantages of locally sourced produce. The initial one to consider is that we can receive homemade produce from
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 in basic areas.
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, when some
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 sell
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 of made produce, they can obtain more financial.
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, we can reduce time and effort by generating amazing
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. To elaborate more, some humans receive locally sourced produce because it is healthy,better tastes
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 over the moon. A study published by New York University concluded that 90% of citizens in recent years in the city has increased in eating homemade produce
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 as garden cheese and fruits. First of all, there are many negatives of homemade produce. The first one to consider is that some
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 don't supply homemade produce because it is few types and costly.
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, some citizens can't buy generate to
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 produce of
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 because they don't have money.
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hand
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, some humans receive imported
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 from other cities because the
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 are cheap.
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, some the city creates more food from all around the world because it is fast and high product
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 there more and more types of
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.
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, studies say these days
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 have become increasingly
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 to imported products of different kinds of
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 to eat. In conclusion, there are no basic answers to
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 topic.
People
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 have different views. From my own personal point of view, a lot of
people
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 need more information about food in the world. It is better it exchange our experience about
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 issue. If we used better
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, we would get a healthy body.

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task achievement
Try to clarify your main points more clearly and make sure they align with the topic question. Ensure that each paragraph addresses a specific point and supports it with relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay. Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next and that your arguments are clearly linked. Consider using transition words and phrases to improve coherence.
task achievement
Enhance the support for your main points by providing specific and relevant examples or evidence. Make sure that your examples are directly related to the arguments you are making.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and reasonably well-structured.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples to support some of your points, which adds credibility to your arguments.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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