Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

There are many unpredictable situations in human life; either satisfactory or unsatisfactory.
While
some people argue that the best solution to face a bad
situation
is to accept it, I side with those who consider that the better way to cope with that
situation
is to improve their
situation
on the positive side.
On the other hand
, having a mindset
such
as just receiving a destiny (in
this
case a bad
situation
) without changing the
situation
to a better one is just a burden for the
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks coherence and cohesion as it does not present its ideas in an easily followable manner and fails to connect them smoothly. Logical structure is not apparent as the essay is unfinished and ideas are not fully developed.
task achievement
The response is incomplete and does not adequately address the task. There is an attempt to discuss both views and state an opinion; however, the essay does not develop this opinion with relevant supporting ideas or examples. To improve, ensure that you provide a clear introduction and conclusion and fully develop all parts of the prompt.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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