he bar chart details the amount of waste that was disposed via landfill, burning and dumping at sea, in a particular European country between 2005 and 2008.

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bar chart provides information about the number of
waste
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disposal
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in 3 different ways (
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, Burning,
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and Dumping
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at
sea
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) in one European nation from 2005 to 2008.
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, it can be clearly seen that the proportion of
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treated by
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landfills
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landfill
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was the highest in all measured years except 2008. In 2005,
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landfill
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was the way
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most
trash
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was treated, about 1800
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tonnes
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. Meanwhile, the
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of
trash
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treated via dumping at
sea
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was only a third of the
trash
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treated by
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, which was 600
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tonnes
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. The
amount
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of
waste
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that was burnt was approximately 500
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tonnes
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. In 2006, the
amount
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of
waste
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treated by
landfill
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was decreased by 600
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tonnes
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, about 1200
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tonnes
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.
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, the
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of
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that was burnt
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increased to 100
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tonnes
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,
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the
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of garbage
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by dumping
the
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sea
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stayed about the same. By 2007, the
waste
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treated via
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landfill
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landfills
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continued to decrease to 900
million
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tonnes
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.
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contrast
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the
waste
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that was burnt is up to 700
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tonnes
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. Meanwhile, the
amount
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of garbage dumped into the
sea
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remained the same. Turn to 2008, it can be clearly seen that the
trash
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treated via
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landfill
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landfills
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and
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dumped
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into the
sea
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both dropped to about 600 and 590
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tonnes
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, respectively. The
waste
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that was burnt continued to increase to about 900
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tonnes
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