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he bar chart details the amount of waste that was disposed via landfill, burning and dumping at sea, in a particular European country between 2005 and 2008.

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bar chart provides information about the number of
waste
disposal
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disposals
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 in 3 different ways (
Landfill
, Burning,
Dumping
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and Dumping
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 at
sea
) in one European nation from 2005 to 2008.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the proportion of
waste
 treated by
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landfills
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landfill
 was the highest in all measured years except 2008. In 2005,
landfill
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the landfill
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 was the way
which
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in which
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 most
trash
 was treated, about 1800
million
tonnes
. Meanwhile, the
amount
 of
trash
 treated via dumping at
sea
 was only a third of the
trash
 treated by
landfill
, which was 600
million
tonnes
. The
amount
 of
waste
 that was burnt was approximately 500
million
tonnes
. In 2006, the
amount
 of
waste
 treated by
landfill
 was decreased by 600
million
tonnes
, about 1200
million
tonnes
.
However
, the
amount
 of
trash
 that was burnt
was
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increased to 100
million
tonnes
,
while
 the
amount
 of garbage
disposed
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disposed of
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 by dumping
the
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in the
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sea
 stayed about the same. By 2007, the
waste
 treated via
landfill
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landfills
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 continued to decrease to 900
million
tonnes
.
In
contrast
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 the
waste
 that was burnt is up to 700
million
tonnes
. Meanwhile, the
amount
 of garbage dumped into the
sea
 remained the same. Turn to 2008, it can be clearly seen that the
trash
 treated via
landfill
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landfills
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 and
dump
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dumped
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 into the
sea
 both dropped to about 600 and 590
million
tonnes
, respectively. The
waste
 that was burnt continued to increase to about 900
million
tonnes
.
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Include specific examples and data to support your descriptions. Quantitative evidence strengthens the analysis of the graph.
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