The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Team
sport helps the children
to participate in group
activities and it helps to communicate with each other at school
. The best way to teach children
to cooperate with others
is through team
sports
. The both agree or disagree concept helps to identify whether it creates an impact or not in their future
.
Co-operating with others
will help us to find new people around society and it helps the children
to build up new confidence levels in their mind and it reduces the risk or burden while
playing a team
sport during the matches and they get support from their coach, this
helps them to gel with other during practice matches. For example
, a new student was joining a sports
club in their school
and except other players had already become close with each other so, the newbie wants to start a conversation with the remaining people else he can't gel with them and no one can understand him while
he was playing in a match and this
will affect the team
and the students future
.
The children
have to play together to prove themselves not only that some children
multi-talented from birth and are capable of participating in group
activities but, they also
like individual games because that kind of children
want to show their skills to others
by participating in individual games. For group
sports
in school
, the multi-talented children
think it is a waste of time and I can't show my talent to others
like this
their mentality will go that the school
needs to allow that kind of children
in individual sports
and will not affect the future
of that child.
In conclusion, team
sports
at school
and an individual sport at school
can have a different impact on their future
but group
activity is best because it helps the children
to get knowledge about others
and the true nature of this
world but in individual sports
, they can't get any knowledge about this
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task achievement
Your introduction sets the stage well, but try to clearly state your position (agree or disagree) at the beginning. This helps the reader know your stance, and keeps the essay focused.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Your paragraphs sometimes mix multiple points, which can confuse the reader. Aim for one clear point per paragraph supported by related sentences.
task achievement
While you use some relevant examples, make sure to explain them clearly and connect them back to your main argument. For example, it would be helpful to expand on how team sports specifically develop cooperation skills versus individual sports.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader smoothly through your points. For example, use words like 'However,' 'In addition,' or 'As a result.'
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes well, but reiterate your stance more clearly and ensure all parts of the essay leading to it are cohesive and aligned with your argument.
task achievement
You clearly identify the importance of cooperation and the potential benefits of team sports in teaching this skill.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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