The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The two line charts illustrate the fluctuations of the proportions of three types of household appliances owned by families and the time those used in housework in a specific country from 1920 to 2019. At the beginning, the percentage of vacuum
machine
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and
refridgerator
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refrigerators
depict
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consistently
increase
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increased
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during a century. The amount of
the
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households who owned
refridgerator
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refrigerator
refrigerators
and vacuum
machine
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machines
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start
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started
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at zero and 30% separately in 1920.
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, these proportions reached
to
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100% successively in 1980 and 2019.
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, the number of families who owned washing machines had seen a
slightly
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decrease in 1980, it shows a
steadily
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growth between 1920 and 2019 and up to 75%.
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, because
the
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electrical facilities contribute
convinience
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convenience
to households in the country, people spend less and less time
to do
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housework. It
dispays
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displays
the percentage of hours of housework decline from 50 hours per week to 10 hours a week.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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