An Australian friend is coming to visit you, and it will be his/her birthday during the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • say how you feel about the visit? • suggest what you could do on his/her birthday? • ask what your friend thinks of your idea? Write at least 150 words You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear….
Dear Sehar,
I am writing a letter to share my feelings
for
coming Change preposition
about
in
my hometown.
Since I received your email I Change preposition
to
was
jubilant that you are planning to visit my city. Wrong verb form
have been
However
, it has been long
time Correct article usage
a long
to
Correct word choice
since to
see
you and it is Wrong verb form
saw
good
time to welcome you. It is mentioned that you are planning vacations in the upcoming month. On 15th of December is your birthday and I want to arrange a Correct article usage
a good
party
on your special day. Although
, I do not want to share arrangements but I have to.
The details of event
are being shared by me so please consider my arrangements. Add an article
the event
an event
Besides
this
, the hotel is arranged by
Change preposition
apply
me
with Correct pronoun usage
apply
buffet
dinner. Correct article usage
a buffet
Moreover
, the decoration
on your birthday will be organised with sprinkles and Fix the agreement mistake
decorations
party
poppers. I want
mention the Add the particle
want to
musicial
string band so our friends can enjoy Correct your spelling
musical
this
party
. Furthermore
, the favourit
songs will be played by the band and you Correct your spelling
favourite
would
happy Wrong verb form
will be
that
moment.
I can arrange all these things on Change preposition
at that
you
special day if you think something is missed by me so do let me know before I finalise Change the pronoun
your
this
party
. If you add more activity
I will admire your participation.
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Warm Wishes,Fix the agreement mistake
activities
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coherence cohesion
The overall structure needs more clarity, with an appropriate introduction and clear paragraphing. Each paragraph should contain one central idea and be linked with cohesive devices.
coherence cohesion
Begin with a suitable greeting and end with an appropriate closing statement. Avoid overly casual language for consistency with the semi-formal nature of the task.
task achievement
It is essential to directly address all three bullet points. Ensure that the letter opens with the expression of feelings about the visit, followed by a clear birthday plan section, and a straightforward request for feedback on the propositions.
task achievement
The tone should be consistent and appropriately matched to the recipient of the letter (a friend). The current tone fluctuates and can be made more natural and friendly.