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Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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 we face occasional trials,
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 as lack of funds or unemployment and
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 some believe it is best to live with them, others are of the opinion
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 way better to make changes to these predicaments. It is much easier to adapt and avoid risks if we follow the sentiments of the first class
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, only if individuals truly
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 efforts, will they find solutions to their problems. I think forcing people to accept their situation can have a negative psychological impact on their growth. When we learn to live in conditions that are unsatisfactory, it is easier to avoid risks because they often pose more problems. Making money or getting a better job might mean falling into the hands of scammers for some and for others huge investments might come at a loss. If we simply choose to adapt and make the most of the situation or to see it as a lesson, we avoid the
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 risks.
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, when my elder brother was not happy with the way his employer treated him, he left his job to start his own tech business with his little savings and
as a result
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, he ended up starving his family.
On the other hand
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, solutions come at a price and the price to pay in
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 case is our continuous effort to modify the situations we find ourselves. Nothing good really comes to those who sit idle but with the dedication to the freedom from situations, we render ourselves open to possible answers.
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, in the quest to make more money, when I was not fully satisfied with my pocket money, I started a couple of businesses and found that the sale of African foods was more profitable than any other start-up I ventured into. In my opinion, awful experiences can make people more inclined to negative thoughts that yield no results and can predispose them to depression, anxiety and other traumas. Inspiration will only come from the determination to try and not
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 the comfort of these experiences because we are learning to train the mind to see beyond its current state. To illustrate, nobody who has sat down and done nothing has ever been able to get themselves out of their state. In conclusion, we avoid the negative consequences of change if we do nothing, but find many ways to tackle problems when we try. I think freedom only comes when we try.

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Ensure that you present your ideas in a clear, logical manner, using paragraphs effectively to separate and emphasize different arguments. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence followed by supporting sentences that further develop the main idea.
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Develop each point with specific examples and explanations to reinforce the arguments being made. Using real-life examples or hypothetical scenarios can make your essay more relatable and persuasive.
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Strive to present comprehensive ideas that are thoroughly elaborated. Avoid superficial handling of the subject matter, and take the time to delve deeper into your arguments.
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Provide more relevant, specific examples to substantiate your points. This can involve drawing from personal experience, factual information, or hypothetical situations that illustrate your argument effectively.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Status quo
  • Resilience
  • Secure
  • Inevitability
  • Struggles
  • Personal growth
  • Fulfillment
  • Adjusting expectations
  • Problem-solving
  • Skill enhancement
  • Steady income
  • Risk versus reward
  • Long-term goals
  • Striving
  • Challenging the status quo
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