An annual event was recently held in your area. Now you want to write to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. Write a letter to the organizers. In your letter, give - • the details of the event • what you most liked about the event • a polite criticism of something you thought could be improved You should write at least 150 words.
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Hitesh Dawar, and I am
the
resident of the city where you recently completed the "Indian Culture Fest 2023" successfully. I am writing Correct article usage
a
this
letter to congratulate you for having such
a beautiful event
in the city and crafted
the combination of culture, products, music and food from the whole nation. It was indeed a well-arranged Wrong verb form
crafting
event
.
Although
, I always explore the culture and various food fest from different parts of the country but
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this
was a step ahead. However
, It was the first time in our city that such
a trade fair was organized, and you brought various art galleries, different Indian food cuisines, handmade crafts, music and clothing.
Besides
, the well-arranged event
, I would like to mention the live band concept was a great addition this
year. This
was the biggest surprise to the local people and the best part of the whole event
. Artists were so melodious and soulful that everyone was fascinated with the vibe.
However
, all the arrangements were excellent but one thing i
would like you to improve from next time onwards, Change the capitalization
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as
the parking area was not well managed, as Correct your spelling
is
due to
this
we were stuck in a jam for around twenty minutes. Apart from
this
, overall
arrangements were well managed and executed.
I hope you will come back with something more exciting next year.
Yours faithfully,
Hitesh DawarSubmitted by hiteshpaul on
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Coherence & Cohesion
For a higher score in logical structure, ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea and supports it without mixing several ideas. Develop each point further with examples or explanations.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate; however, try to add a more personalized touch to the closing remarks, which could enhance the overall tone of the letter.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good job on maintaining a single idea per paragraph. To further improve, enhance the transitions between paragraphs for a smoother flow.
Task Achievement
Well done on providing a complete response to the task with clear detail on each point. To achieve a higher band, expand on each point with more depth and personal reflection.
Task Achievement
The tone is mostly suitable for a letter to event organizers. However, for a higher score, ensure that the level of formality is consistent throughout and address the criticism more tactfully to match the congratulatory tone of the letter.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.