Many supermarket are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. what are the reason for this? is this a positive or negative development?
Many
supermarket
choose Change to a plural noun
supermarkets
selling
Change the verb form
to sell
products
from other countries rather than local products
because it can bring low taxes
. in my opinion, it lead to negative development which is
local Verb problem
means
products
will decrease in sales and it has impact
Add an article
an impact
the impact
to
small business.
The reason is that will bring low Change preposition
on
taxes
. Many companies consider to get
more income by Change the verb form
getting
find
out Change the verb form
finding
any
product will bring love Correct word choice
that any
taxes
for them. Because of low taxes
, it will impacted
Change the verb form
impact
be impacted
to
product Change preposition
apply
price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
become
cheaper. Fix the infinitive
to become
For example
, many business
in Indonesia Change to a plural noun
businesses
buy
Change the verb form
buys
products
from china
Capitalize word
China
such
as electronic
, skincare and others because they realise that the Replace the word
electronics
proce
from Correct your spelling
product
Add an article
the product
a product
product
is cheaper than local Fix the agreement mistake
products
products
.
There are
a negative development, local Change the verb form
is
products
will experiences
a decrease in sales. Internation trade will have an impact on sales of local Change the verb form
experience
products
in the coutries
. There will be Correct your spelling
countries
marker
competition between local Correct your spelling
market
products
and international products
. For instance
, indonesia
Change the capitalization
Indonesia
consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
prefer
buy Add the particle
prefer to
skintific
(skincare made Correct your spelling
scientific
from
Change preposition
in
cina
) rather than wardah (skincare made Correct your spelling
China
from
Change preposition
in
indonesia
) because they like good quality Change the capitalization
Indonesia
with
Change preposition
at
cheaper
Correct article usage
a cheaper
price
.
Another issue is that has an impact Fix the agreement mistake
prices
to
small industries. Change preposition
on
Number
of selling Change the article
A number
The number
products
local
Change the word
locally
increase
in some countries can lead to market competition Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
so
that make effect Correct word choice
which
for
small industries. Small industries Change preposition
on
lost
Wrong verb form
lose
chance
to sell their Add an article
the chance
a chance
products
because consumer
like to buy international Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
products
.
in conlusion
, a lot of Correct your spelling
conclusion
supermarket
tend to sell Change to a plural noun
supermarkets
products
from another countries
because they realise lower Replace the adjective
another country
other countries
taxes
. I believe , it has negative development such
as number
of selling local Change the article
the number
products
reduce
and it has Wrong verb form
being reduced
effect
Add an article
an effect
the effect
to
small companies.Change preposition
on
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