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4.What key criteria does your target company use in their recruitment process?

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Another key criterion that the company look for is analytical skills, which is very important for
people
 working in investment banking.
People
 regularly engage in analyzing debt and equity structures, financial transactions and other crucial elements that play an important role in making critical decisions in the moment of recommending financial strategies to consumers.
Additionally
,
people
 need to be strategic and logical thinkers who can analyse data and different situations in the financial market. HSBC specifically looks for individuals who possess exceptional analytical abilities to ensure decision-making in a dynamic financial environment.
Such
 as the interpretation of financial statements, the financial health of corporations and investment opportunities. In the recruitment process,
people
 will be likely evaluated through case studies.
People
 who understand how to conduct analyses will make better decisions in the field of investment banking.
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structure
Your essay needs a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your argument effectively. The introduction should present the topic, and the conclusion should summarize the key points made.
cohesion
Work on creating more cohesive paragraphs by using a wider range of cohesive devices, like transition words or phrases that show contrast, comparison, cause and effect, etc.
task response
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all following sentences support this idea. Avoid any irrelevant details that do not contribute to the main point.
content
To further strengthen your task achievement, incorporate more specific examples to demonstrate understanding of the topic. Use real-world examples where applicable to give more weight to your analysis.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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