Some people believe that following health advice on the Internet is a good thing. However, some others claim that online health advice should not be followed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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to not follow any
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because the information is easily
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it way cheaper than actually consulting it with a licensed professional doctor, it is understandable because professional
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for granted because they believe that
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should use it wisely and properly for depending on the experts. It is
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especially if the information
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not valid or questionable by the professional
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experts should provide their own platform which provides more authority on the
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task achievement
Ensure that both views and your own opinion are fully developed with clear and detailed explanations. Avoid general statements and include more specific details and examples in your argumentation.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Check that your essay has an appropriate introduction and conclusion that clearly presents the topic and summarizes the main points of the essay. Avoid unrelated information or generic statements.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health advice
  • Internet
  • believe
  • good thing
  • claim
  • followed
  • discuss
  • views
  • opinion
  • advantages
  • access
  • information
  • resources
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • connect
  • concerns
  • alternative
  • complementary
  • treatments
  • disadvantages
  • credibility
  • unreliable
  • sources
  • misinterpretation
  • misunderstanding
  • overwhelm
  • conflicting
  • advice
  • opinions
  • potential
  • self-diagnosis
  • self-medication
  • personal opinion
  • beneficial
  • wisely
  • cautiously
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