Some people believe that following health advice on the Internet is a good thing. However, some others claim that online health advice should not be followed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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the internet
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others are standing that it is necessary to follow health
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opinion
. Getting some Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
health
tips on the internet
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accesible
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accessible
for
anyone and Change preposition
to
making
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health
facilities are so expensive with
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that
people
may access it. Additionally
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valid or not.
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prohibit others to take
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from taking
health
advices
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internet
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doctors
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people's
health
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on the expert itself. There could be Replace the word
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misinformantion
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misinformation
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utilisation
health
tips is inevitable. So, in order to avoid any health
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
internet
, people
should use it wisely and properly for depending on the experts. It is povital
to leave unnecessary information that can be misleading about Correct your spelling
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health
condition
especially if the information Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
was
not valid or questionable by the professional Wrong verb form
is
doctors
. Moreover
, health
experts should provide their own platform which provides more authority on the internet
rather than any questionable health
advices
. Change the wording
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pieces of advice
bits of advice
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online
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an online
health
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task achievement
Ensure that both views and your own opinion are fully developed with clear and detailed explanations. Avoid general statements and include more specific details and examples in your argumentation.
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coherence cohesion
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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