The graph below shows the total percentage of films and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in UAE. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make the comparisons where relevant
The bar charts depict the percentage
whichis
Correct your spelling
which is
Wrong verb form
released
releasing
Wrong verb form
released
films
and how sales
of tickets
in Correct article usage
the United
United
Correct article usage
the United
Ara
Emirates from1996 Correct your spelling
Arab
Change preposition
from
to
2000.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, while
four catergories
of Correct your spelling
categories
fils
were released Correct your spelling
films
remarkebly
in 1996 and 2000. Correct your spelling
remarkably
remarkable
However
, tickets
Change the noun form
ticket
sales
were
not Verb problem
did
increased
Wrong verb form
increase
instead
of
comedy Change preposition
apply
films
.
In 1996 and 2000, most of the films
released
in Drama which is about a quarter and more than a third respectively. Add a missing verb
were released
However
, their tickets
were not issued significantly. Both
2 Change preposition
In both
years
it shows more than a
15%. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, the fantasy films
released between 10% to more than 15% but, their ticket sales
not reached
10% in both Wrong verb form
reach
years
.
Then
the Romance films
launched remaining the same persentage
which is 5% in 1996 and 2000 Correct your spelling
percentage
in addition
to that, their ticket sales
less than 5%. By contrast
, comedy films
were the best tickets
Change the noun form
ticket
sales
compared with other films
. That is
about more than 20% in both years
. Finally
, the bar charts revealed Drama in 1996 and 2000. Although
, the Comedy films
are the most famous and the best ticket sales
around these 2 years
.Submitted by dinupremarathna on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, sales, tickets, years with synonyms.
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