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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopement next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

#plans #show #site #airport #redevelopement #year #summarise #information #features #comprasions
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The two different plans
shows
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show
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 the Southwest
Airport
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 before and after reconstruction.
Overall
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,
this
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 reconstruction will quitely change
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airport's
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the airport's
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 shape and emplacement of some points.
Firstly
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, not reconstructed
airport
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 has two entrances,
one
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 for departures and
one
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 for arrivals.
Departures
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The departures
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 terminal has
one
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 check-in post and
one
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 cafe,
however
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,
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 terminal has nothing but passport control and customs.
Walkway
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The walkway
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 begins after passport control and
connected
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is connected
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 with 8 gates for
passsengers
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passengers
.
Redevolopment
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Redevelopment
 will change almost everything in the Southwest
Airport
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.
Number
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The number
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 of entrances for departure flights and arrival
flight
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flights
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 will increase from 2 to 4.
Also
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, the car parking and ATM will be added to the arrivals terminal. After security and passport control, shops will meet you
in
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on
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 the main side of
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the departures
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departures
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departure
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 terminal. The
quantity
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number
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 of gates will rocket from 8 to 18 after reconstruction and
also
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, there would be a Sky train
instead
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 of
walkway
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a walkway
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. In conclusion,
this
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redevelopement
Correct your spelling
redevelopment
development
 will edit the whole
airport
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 and will make it much
comfortable
Correct quantifier usage
more comfortable
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 for
passangers
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passengers
 and staff.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear and logical structure which makes it challenging to follow. Consider organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
While you have an introduction and conclusion, they are not clearly stated. Your introduction should explicitly introduce the topic and outline the main points of comparison, and your conclusion should summarize the key features.
coherence cohesion
Although you have provided some main points about the changes after the redevelopment, your supporting statements could be more detailed. Use specific details and examples to support each point.
task achievement
You have addressed the task, but the response is incomplete. You should ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully answered and that your essay provides a comprehensive comparison of the before and after redevelopment plans.
task achievement
The ideas presented in the essay need to be articulated more comprehensively. Provide a more in-depth analysis of the changes, highlighting key differences and similarities with precise vocabulary.
task achievement
Specific examples which illustrate the changed and unchanged elements would enhance the quality of your report. Use data or illustrative examples from the plans to make your points more convincing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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