The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.
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par chart illustrates the
persentage
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percentage
of spending
the
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money
for
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on
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education
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and
health
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in UAE between 1985
to
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and
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1993 . it
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cleare
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cleared
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from the
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graph
that the biggest spending in
health
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in 1993
.
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while
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, the lowest spending the money
in
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education
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in 1985 .
According to
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waht
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what
is shown , the
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first
period
comparetive
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comparative
between them in 1985 spending on
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is
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more
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then
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health
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the
diffrence
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difference
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2%
then
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health
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in 1985 was approximately 7.2% and
education
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was about 10% .
while
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, there are
incearse
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increased
increase
between 1990 to 1993 on
education
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for 0.7% .
health
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spending the
maney
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money
between 1900 to 1993 are 6.3% and 10% respectively .
to sum up
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, we could say that in all
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comparative
the most
incearse
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increase
is
education
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.
however
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,
health
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are
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wobbly in all
yaers
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years
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, health with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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