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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart provides information about how often
people
used to
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eat fast
foods
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food
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 in restaurants in percentage. These statistics involve information between 2003 and 2013 in the USA. At
the
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first glance, it is clearly seen that the most amount of
eating
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fast
foods
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food
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 in restaurants was once a
week
 and once or twice a month
among
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in
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 these years.
Moreover
, it seems that the percentage of
people
 having it never passed more than about 3236. As is observed, these statistics show that the proportion of
people
 who ate fast
foods
, and who never did is almost equal in given years.
Besides
, in the year 2013, both
people
 who used to eat fast
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food
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foods
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food
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 several
times
 a
week
 and
people
 who ate it just a few
times
 a year
are
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 almost the same which
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involved
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 159 of the USA society. The interesting point is the consumption of fast
foods
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food
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 in restaurants seems to
be
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 increased between 2003 and 2006, and after
that
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that,
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 it began to be stable for time laps
such
 as every day, a few
times
 a year and never in 2013. Despite all,
this
 range became less in 2013 for time laps like several
times
 a
week
 and once a
week
 which illustrates the
people
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people's
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 awareness of how unhealthy fast
foods
 were.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, foods, week, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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