The diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugarcane.

The illustration

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how

sugar

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is produced from sugarcane.

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, it is a 7 stage, man-made linear process. It begins by growing

sugar

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canes

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cane

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then

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and then

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harvesting it, which

are

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crushed , purified, evaporated,

seperated

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separated

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dried, resulting in

sugar

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. First of all,

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sugarcane

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sugarcanes

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sugarcane

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are

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grown for

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a 12

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-18 month period and it is harvested by machine or by manpower. After that, it is crushed and turned into juice, which is purified by using

limestone

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a limestone

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filter. Following that,

juice

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the juice

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is evaporated by heat to make it into syrup.

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, it is placed in

centrifuge

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seperate

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separate

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crystals from

syrup

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the syrup

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. From

this

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, it is transferred to a container for drying and cooling.

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sugar

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is formed.

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugarcane.

Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper asking to advertise your ad on the front page of the newspaper. In your letter, give details of the ad that you want to publish mention that you want the ad to be published on the front page say how you would like to pay for the advertisement