A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Animals
have always been used by
humans
in some form to satisfy their needs.
However
,
while
some people think that it is more important to use them as we desire for
food
and medical research, I believe that
animals
should be treated in the same way
humans
are and have similar rights. With regard to the exploitation of
animals
, people believe it is acceptable for several reasons.
Firstly
, they think that
humans
are the most important beings on the planet, and everything must be done to ensure human survival. If
this
means experimenting on
animals
so that we can fight and find cures for diseases,
then
this
takes priority over animal suffering.
Furthermore
, it is believed by some that
animals
do not feel pain or loss as
humans
do, so if we have to kill
animals
for
food
or other uses,
then
this
is morally acceptable.
However
, I do not believe these arguments stand up to scrutiny.
To begin
, it has been shown on numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories via animal rights groups that
animals
feel as much pain as
humans
do, and they suffer when they are kept in cages for long periods.
In addition
, a substantial amount of animal research is done for cosmetics, not to find cures for diseases, so
this
is unnecessary.
Finally
, it has
also
been proven that
humans
can get all the nutrients and vitamins that they need from green vegetables and fruit.
Therefore
, again, having to kill
animals
for
food
is not an adequate argument.
To sum up
,
although
some people argue killing
animals
for research and
food
is ethical, I would argue there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that
this
is not the case, and,
therefore
, steps must be taken to improve the rights of
animals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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