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globalization is positeve for economies but it is negative side should not be ignored. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #positeve #economies #side
Nowadays,
globalization
 has a
lot
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 benefits which
leads
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lead
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 to stimulate good economies.
However
, it has a bad impact on the world and it doesn't have to stand inside. I strongly agree with
this
 point of view that
globalization
 can improve living standards and a mutual understanding between people. Recently,
globalization
 has opened a lot of doors for living better. It means that
the
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society has various opportunities
such
 as good diffusion innovations which are able to make life much easier.
For example
, the government has already created a lot of foreign investments so any person is capable
to drive
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 local businesses.
For
this
 reason, the
economic
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 is peaking dramatically.
Moreover
, the most important reason that
globalization
 gives to people
to
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 comprehend what is going on and how another humanity lives.
For instance
, in the past,
population
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the population
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 could not travel very often so they were narrow-minded but not new generation is able to travel as much as possible and share with new inhabitants our traditional
and
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experiences
To sum up
, all these undoubtedly influences
so
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they
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lead to
impeccable
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an impeccable
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 life.
For
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 my point of view,
globalization
 has just started to modernize our
life
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lives
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 and expand much more ability for everyone.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure. It is crucial to organize an essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single focus. An introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement, followed by body paragraphs that support your view with specific examples or evidence. A concluding paragraph should then summarize the main points and restate your opinion. As the author, strive to make your essay easy to follow
task achievement
Your essay needs clear, well-developed ideas. Each paragraph should begin with a topic sentence that indicates what the paragraph will be about. This should be followed by explanations or examples that support the initial claim. Avoid making broad statements without backing them up with details or reasons. Try to be more explicit in explaining how globalization has a negative side, as the prompt suggests discussing both the positive and negative aspects

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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