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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#companies #countries
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 are becoming increasingly common in
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 becoming common in developing nations. There are multifarious jobs available for local dwellers.
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 because more workers were needed to good opportunities from these
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 company. Paradoxically, there
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 becoming increasingly common in developing countries. Many dwellers prefer
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 rather than smaller
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 are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. The latter is more than the former
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coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates poor logical structure, with ideas jumping abruptly and lacking clear transitions between them. To improve, focus on organizing ideas more logically, making sure each paragraph flows naturally into the next, with clear topic sentences and logical progression of thoughts.
coherence cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present but lack clarity and do not effectively summarize the essay's main points or restate the topic in a comprehensible manner. Practice crafting introductions that introduce the topic and provide a clear thesis statement. Conclusions should effectively summarize the main points and reiterate your stance on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Main points are present but not well-developed or supported. To score higher, expand on your ideas with more detail, providing clear examples and explanations to support your arguments. Consider using relevant and specific examples to bolster your points.
task achievement
The response addresses the task, but only partially. The essay does not fully answer both parts of the question (advantages and disadvantages), with only a cursory mention of one disadvantage. To improve, ensure that each part of the task is fully explored and answered.
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Ideas are not clearly presented or comprehensive. Strive to express your ideas more clearly by focusing on sentence structure, grammar accuracy, and vocabulary choice. A clearer presentation of ideas can be achieved through simple, direct language and well-structured sentences.
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Examples provided are not fully relevant or well-developed. Work on incorporating examples that specifically illustrate the points you are trying to make. These should be concrete, detailed, and directly tied to your argument to add support and depth to your response.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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