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The bar chart gives information about the comparison of visitors going to distinct museums in London from June to October.

The bar chart gives information about the comparison of visitors going to distinct museums in London from June to October.
The bar chart provides information about the
numbers
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number
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 in four thematic places in London between June to October. In general, the
british
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British
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museum
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 is the most popular place for tourists
while
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the national
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national
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National Museum
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museum
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 is
place
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the place
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 with the lowest
avarage
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average
 of
visitors
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.
According to
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 the data, the British
Museum
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reach
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reached
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 a peak of
visitors
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 at approximately 700.000 in August.
Similarly
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,
History
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the History
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Museum
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also
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reach
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reached
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 the highest
tourist
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number of tourists
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 in August with 600.000 people
comes
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coming
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. The lowest record of people visiting
History
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the History
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Museum
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 happens in June and July with roughly 400.000
visitors
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. Meanwhile, the statistics
shows
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show
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 the
visitors
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 of History
Museum
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 dropped
at
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to
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 around 200.000 in October.
In contrast
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, the National
Museum
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 always held the record for the lowest
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 every month over the period, the average of
the
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apply
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people who visit
National
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the National
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Museum
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 is around 200.000-300.000 per month. Meanwhile, the number of science
museum
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 shows a decline from June to August and reach its lowest point in October at 300.000
attendes
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attendees
attendee
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Visitations
  • Trends
  • Peak season
  • Popularity
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Surge
  • Temporary exhibitions
  • Demographics
  • Attract
  • Museum tour
  • Cultural attraction
  • Historical exhibits
  • Tourist influx
  • Visitor statistics
  • Monthly comparison
  • Seasonal variation
  • Cultural significance
  • Footfall
  • Exhibit appeal
  • Museum's profile
  • Visitor engagement
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