The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart shows the proportion of major causes
on
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of
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becoming
Verb problem
making
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agricultural
land
less productive. The table illustrates the information about how these causes affected three regions: North
America
,
Europe
and
Oceania
; during the
1990's
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1990s
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.
Overall
, it is
clever
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clear
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from
pie
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the pie
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chart that the
percentage
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percentages
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of causes are close to each other and the highest proportion
has
Verb problem
is
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over-grazing. From the
table
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table,
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we can see that the most
land
affected
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is affected
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in
Europe
. Over cultivation affected 28% of the
land
,
while
deforestation caused the degradation of 30%
the
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of the
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land
. The percentage of over-grazing is 35%, which is the highest
from
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of
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all.
Also
, 7% of soils were affected by other reasons. Starting with North
America
, we can see that 5% of the total
land
is degraded,
while
the proportions of
Europe
and
Oceania
are 23% and 13% respectively. Deforestation caused 0.2% of the
land
in North
America
.
Europe
has the highest proportion of damage, showing 9.8%,
while
in
Oceania
- 1.7%. Over-cultivation didn't cause
Oceania
during the 1990's,
while
in
Europe
- 7.7% and in North
America
- 3.3 % of the
land
damaged
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was damaged
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by it. But over-grazing damaged
the
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apply
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most of the
land
in
Oceania
, with
index
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an index
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11
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of 11
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%,
while
in
Europe
and North
America
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America,
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it shows 5.5% and 1.5% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, america, europe, oceania with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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